ABSORB
Midnight absorbed the hour. I watched David as he lit the candle. Placing me on the table top, he laid me down, still and flat. Silent I remained. I still cannot forget the night. Every word remains absorbed in me.
The silence broke as the two visitors came. Removing their caps, they sat beside me. Close enough to touch my sides. I never felt so nervous before. I don’t remember their names anymore. All I can recall is that one was dressed in red and the other was in black.
As the wind blew, I tried to move away from them. But, like water absorbed by a sponge, the visitors rolled towards me.
David remained unmoved. Everything seemed normal to him. Finally he sat down and I was left alone with three.
All of a sudden, I felt something heavy on me. David, it was. Welcoming the one in black, he placed his hand on me. As he played with his fingers from left to right, the candle light danced on me. His sweat I absorbed.
“How are you?” asked the black.
Neither David nor I replied. The red one, positioned above my head, entered the absorbing conversation.
“I’ve been in London for the past three years. I never thought I’d meet you here. Not this way. Mother said you left us. Left us for another woman. Fortunately I’m a school teacher now. And luckily our school organised a visit to the old age. I was going through the list to count the number of members. There I found your name. I couldn’t recognize you by your picture but my mind was absorbed with those ripe old memories we once shared,” the red one replied as he swayed on me. David moved him gently.
“Could you recognize me father?” the red one continued.
Even in a room with members four, there was an awkward silence. Finally the black one made some design on my right foot. I felt tickled but didn’t move. The candle extinguished. The visitors put on their caps. David lifted me and held me tight. With his tightest grip we moved to the room next door. The visitors didn’t object.
Holding me close, as close as he could, David sat on his bed. Running his fingers on me, his tears ran down. Those drops I absorbed. He loosened his grip and I swayed to the ground. David moved away. As he covered himself with a blanket, I watched him fall asleep.
The red pen and black will dry someday and the letters will absorb in me. I wish I could do something but I’m an unsent letter hiding stories.
By Payal Dutta
Pc: royalty free images from pexels
Pretty cool story ! 🙌
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Thank you so much 💕💕🍫🍫
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Incredible use of words. If that sounds simple, it’s not. I love words. You do them well.
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Thank you so much ma’am 💖💖
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Its was absolutely wonderful to read it. Thank you.
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Thank you so much ma’am 💖
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Nice
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Thank you so much 💖💖
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🙂
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🍫🍫💕💕
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Never been so Eager to read anyone’s post
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Well this means a lot to me 💖💖💃💃 💃🌸🌸
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Its because Ur work adored me
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Very bold…I love it.
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Thank you so much 💕💕🍫🍫
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and chocolate too…thank you! ❤
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Yes candies too 🍭🍭
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I am on a keto diet..so I will only take the chocolate 😉
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Well, I’ll keep those candies with me and wait for your diet to end 😝😝
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sounds like a plan 😉
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Security deposit 😝😝
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hmmm..i like your thinking
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😂😂😂 interest-ing to know that
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But seriously you need either a good photographer or a good barber. Plus you have to gift me “real” chocolates. Start saving money .
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Ok I’ll find them both in just dial 😂
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And you cleverly skip the commitment on chocolates 🤔
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No. I send them via. Swiggy 😝
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Award to your patience to respond. You must a good friend for sure.
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🍫🍫 for that second statement.
🍬🍬 For the first
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You are a 60 year old soul in a 20 something frame. Can’t win .
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Ayiioooo 🙈 I won you mean?
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Ohhhh. Thanks.
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🍫🍫 for letting me win
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😑😑😑. Seriously is there any other medium to talk. Am bored here. Kindly suggest .
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Hahaha hahaha hahaha 😂😂
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Okay. Guess there are subtle ways to say no . And I get it . 😑😑
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Well I’m reading you. That’s a better thing to do than chat I guess.
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Hehe. You are reading fiction whereas a curious reality awaits 😜😝😂😂
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Kindly delete conversation. Your post would look horrible with such long trail . And thanks. It was fun talking.
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Let them be. I’ll read them some day later and laugh again. 😂😂
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Hehe.
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“Baalo ki dukaan” -keep it your title. It’s apt 😂😁
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😂😂😂😂😂 you’re funny
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That’s what matters. Making a human laugh . It’s an ultimate high .
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True be that. I live this concept of yours 🍫🍫
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Strangers are like aliens. They come , you talk . You have no connect and thats where magic is. No experience, no expectations and nothing to boast off. It’s like only a current that connects .
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How can you be so sure that strangers are aliens and you are not 😝
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Hehe. Connect is alien , I mean
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😂😂😂 I thought you called me an alien 🙈
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Yeah , you are alien to me. Race religion region colour age .. unaware of everything . No notions . No wall or filter yet
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We’re aliens not water purifiers 😝
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Filter means being very conscious of what to or not to share . Water purifier nahi 😂😂
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I know. But you didn’t mention it so I interpret it my way 😂
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I thought , your head is covered with so much hair. It surely must be hiding a good brain . So didn’t mention. 😁🤣
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Lol 😂 so many thoughts about me might isolate yourself
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No you are simple Baal ki dukaan. No other thoughts.
Btw are you an engineer? Because before replying, you like my previous comment. Very step wise process 😂😂😂🤣🤣🤣
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No I’m not an engineer 😂😂
Btw the way you’re commenting on my hair, mind me asking, are you bald?
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Yeah . You can say so. 😂😂😂
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What a filter between us 😂😂
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I am bald ,ugly with weird face 😂😂😂😂
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Maybe. But you have a good sense of humor 🤗
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Start laughing at yourself. Sense of humour aa jayega 😉
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Good one 😂😂
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So tell something about yourself? Student or business or creative artist?
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Currently a third year english honours student. 😂😂 Creative artist! 🙈🙈
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Wow. So what I write would be kg stuff for you . 😂😂😂😂
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No they are kilometers stuff for me 😂😂
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Hehe. Your post is crossing 110 remarks. Pata chala , you got awarded for highest comments and I got fooled by your words 😁😉🤣
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If it happens so, I promise to start a conversation in your post too. Why not be famous together 🤗🤗
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Naa. I don’t like my post being part of unrelated conversations. If I feel I interact with fellow writers or readers through WhatsApp. It better.
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We’re all different. We have our own comfort zones.
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Hmm. God was creative . It was dumb human who invented Xerox machine 😆
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And the wise ones made a printer 😝
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That also is a copier. So they weren’t wise. They coloured their copies . That’s it.
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And added cut paste too 😝
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That comes from basic human psychology of instant fame. Cut so that original resource is changed. Technology is a live example of human hypocrisy
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??
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Wow, that was a beautiful piece… I really liked the fluidity of your writing and even though I could somewhat guess where you were trying to lead the the reader, the ending moved me… It’s a wonderful write-up…. If you are a full-time writer, I’d like to say that you are a skilled one and if not, then you should consider it because you really have a flair for it… kudos and keep on writing…
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This means a lot to me 🍫🍫 and thank you for reading 💕💕 waiting to read you too 🤗🤗
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Good one
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Thank you so much 💕💕 candies for you 🍭🍭🍭
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Hehe. What was this ? 😂😂😂
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Candies for reading me 😝😝
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Hehe. I like dairy milk. You can send over, anytime you feel like treating a kid for chocolates 😉
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🍫🍫🍫🍫🍫🍫 celebrations for you…next time definitely 😝
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Hehe. You can to glance through my blog. It ain’t that bad. Guess you will be able to tolerate most of the stuff 😂😂😂
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Great. I’ll leave some chocolates in my favorite posts 😝
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Chocolates I need it I real 😉. Rest all you can fake it. Am too serious about my sugar in life. 🤣
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Well if we do meet ever, I’ll give you
a box of chocolates for sure. Till then 👉🍫🍫
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Hehe. True. Which part of the world you stay?
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India, West Bengal.
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Cool. Very creative hub of India. Do you have WhatsApp ?
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Yes. But I don’t use it much.
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Again a surprise . Are you 60 year old or of some other decade ? 😂
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Lol 😂 are you asking my age or pulling my leg?
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Hehe. Am telling truth. It’s upto you how you interpret 😉.
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Hehe. Well then, my profile picture is mine. It’s upto you how you interpret 😉
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It’s all hair in profile . You need a barber 😂
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😝😝😝😝 I’m still laughing 😂😂
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Conversation getting too long. Give your WhatsApp. It’s fun to tease you
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Hope you didn’t fall laughing or are you searching literally for a barber ?
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Searching 😂😂 in justdial 😝
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WhatsApp please . 😂😂😂
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Just a joke. Am not stalking you. 😂😂😂. Otherwise i did be the ongoing movement 😀😀🤣😂
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Victim of
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Perfectly fine 😂😂
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Reblogged this on Oyia Brown.
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Thank you so much 💕🍫
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I feel kind of lot of work put on this story..well done
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Thank you so much 💕💕 glad you liked it 🤗
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you are welcom and u gotta one story only?
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I joined WordPress 2 days ago
I still can’t figure out how to delete comments. I commented on my own post like a fool and I’m unable to delete it 😫😫😭😭
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oh you can …do you use mobile or laptop?…and open up the blog and click Read on the left right corner..u could see comments..aall comments
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Thank you thank you thank you so much 💕💕💕 I did it. Yeaaahhhh
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oh u did nw? i dint read comments though
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Yes I did it. Thank you so much for helping. 🍫🍫🍫
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you are welcome my friend..by the way u are new in blogging? or hows it..totally new
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Yes new in blogging. Absolutely new world.
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coool
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Hi Payal, your writing is very fluidic and might I say absorbing too. But the story interleaves in an out leaving me a lil’ confused.
Looking to read more.
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No problem. I hope you understand my next story. Don’t worry you’re not the first one who’s unable to understand me. So chill.
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There are very few.. Who can absorb others in their writings.. You are one of them
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That was a very big compliment 🍫🍫🍫 thank you so much 🤗🤗🍭🍭
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I hope you writing mesmerize every single person who reads it ❤
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Thank you so much for reading me 💕💕🍬🍬
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A great read, very visual, you put me right in the story, just living this short read moment.
P.S. The black and red where probably communist that´s why you stayed with David.
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Thank you so much 💖💖 glad you enjoyed reading it and yes this Communist interpretation was a new one. I liked it. 🌸🌸
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My pleasure, I say again, it was a good read, later when time permits I´ll get to other things you write. I´ll be what I have coined ¨doing my cool stalker moves¨
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Well, then I’ll do the same. Twill be fun waiting for each other to post and interpret. 🤗🤗
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No, there can only be one stalker, that is me.
Have a great day Payal. And…… read you later you alligator!
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I’ll be a good reader then 😝😝 have a good day too 🤗🤗🍬🍬
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Beautiful piece mate ✔️💯
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Thank you so much 💕💕🍫🍫
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Pleasure always for beautiful stuff mate
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🌸🌸🌸 thank you again 🤗🤗
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Love the way you write.
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Thank you so much 💕
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Thanks for coming by my blog. I am so happy it brought me here — Awesome writing – you had me sitting at the end of my chair the whole time. 🙂
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Thank you so much 💕💕 I’m glad to know that you liked it 🤗
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Most welcome! 🙂 Keep writing. 🙂
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Kya dost , baithe baithe tumne itne follower badha liye. Sahi hai
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Next time I’ll stand and post. What say? 😂😂
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Ok. Bye
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Reblogged this on Mindfulthoughts.
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Thank you so much 🌸🌸🤗🤗💖💖
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Wow, the italics really emphasize certain words.
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Thank you so much for reading 💖💖🤗🤗🍭🍭
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I look forward writing my own amazing story in future just like yours 🙂
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I look forward to read your amazing story in future. 🤗🤗 Thank you so much for reading me. 💕💕
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Beautiful story and I love the almost paradoxical style
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Thank you so much for reading 💖💖 glad you liked it. Looking forward to read you more. 🤗🤗
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Power. Full. Story. I don’t know where your head was at when you wrote this but it is interesting and very good. I like that it is a story but also a poem. There is an unusual feeling in there. Love it!
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Thank you so much for reading 💕💕 I’m happy to know that you liked…oops loved it… It really means alot for beginner like me 🤗🤗
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Awww 💕 I think we are all beginners every time we set new words down. 💗
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That’s a very positive thought. Loved your view. 🤗🤗💕💕
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Can we collaborate on some story. I haven’t written one, but have idea.
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Well I love your approach but my style of writing is too different
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Hehe. subtle way of saying no 😂😂😂😂😂😂. But I like it upfront. I know am a very good writer. So thanks
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Everyone has their own way of writing. You can’t merge short stories. Moreover I don’t understand where my mind wanders when I write. I’m extremely bad in collaboration and so I avoid it.
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Okay
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Tbh I enjoy reading your poems
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Thanks for compliment. I sort of mix and match . Jugaad kar leta hum of words. 😉
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You’re welcome 🤗 waiting to read you more
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Have more than 100 post . You can read them . Give honest feedback . I will appreciate if criticism is also offered
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Well I won’t be able to read them all today but certainly I’ll read them one day at a time
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Hehe. Of course. Am not so selfish 😀😬😬
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This is great. 🙂 Loved it.
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Thank you so much for reading 💕💕 glad you liked it 🤗🍫
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Beautiful❣
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Thank you so much 💕💕🌸🌸
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My pleasure❣
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Simply brilliant! Congrats
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thank you so much 🙂
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🙂
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🍫🍫
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Super piece. Keep pushing the envelope! Chris T.
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Thank you so much for reading me 💕
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Really very lovely
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Thank you so much 💕💕💕 glad you liked it 🌸
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Thank you for dropping by my blog.
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Pleasure all mine 🤗
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Very nice
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Thanks a ton ♥ ♥
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My pleasure
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🤗🤗🤗
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Reblogged this on Whispers of a poet's heart.
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Lovely post. I see someone’s on the ground here. Hahaha! Nice!
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wow. its gripping
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Thank you so much for reading me 💕
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You’re writing is very engaging and unique. Thanks for popping in and reading me. I really appreciate it! 😉
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Thank you so much for reading me. 💕💕 Daddy calls me the best stalker 😝😝 I just popped to read you because I’m good at stalking 🙊🙊
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Ha! Excellent. Never underestimate the value of a talented stalker! It can be a wonderful ego boost. Let’s hope it doesn’t get creepy! 😂🙊😉
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Hahaha 😂😂😂 creepy? Not at all.
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This was very . . . interesting.
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Thank you so much for stopping by and reading me 💖 💖 glad you liked it 🤗
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Do you mind? I’m sharing this.
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I don’t mind at all 💕💕
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Wow, this is such an imaginative and evoking poem! I love how you used personificatioms all throughout. It’s so haunting and beautiful. Truly a joy to read thank you
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A great read! Powerful, and engaging! I love the way you write, the emotions and thoughts it evokes! Thank you!
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Thank you so much for reading me 💖 💖 glad you liked it 🌸 chocolates for you 🍫💕
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Thanks?
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Hi Payal. Wanted a small favor from you. Could not reach out to you on Facebook
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